You know I didn't pay that much attention to the grammar, but upon second read you are so right. Very simple, repeated sentences and poor connectivity. "We see the parents and children being drove apart!"... one of many. I wonder what school Kristi Pelzel attended so I can avoid it?
Damn, Whit. I like the content, but this author's grammar is DISTRACTING!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you shared it, though.
You know I didn't pay that much attention to the grammar, but upon second read you are so right. Very simple, repeated sentences and poor connectivity. "We see the parents and children being drove apart!"... one of many. I wonder what school Kristi Pelzel attended so I can avoid it?
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